This paper would like to propose–

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I will be analyzing the differences between several–

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I will be analyzing the differences between twelve homeowner’s yards in terms of temperature and humidity–

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I will be analyzing the temperature and humidity differences between twelve yards spread throughout the Phoenix metro area. Each yard has a different landscape composition, but they all fall under one of three categories: xeric, mesic, or combination. The yards will be further classified by their percent shade. I–

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There have been many studies done on the urban heat island effect, and on possible mitigation scenarios–

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There have been many studies done on the UHI and potential mitigation strategies, particularly the use of urban forestry. This option, while shown to be an effective cooling strategy (cite), is potentially problematic in an arid city such as Phoenix, Arizona, where the is intense and water resources scarce. Indeed, many cities in the metro area currently offer rebates to homeowners who voluntarily turn their yards into a xeriscape–

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…into a xeriscape (a common term for low-water landscaping, typically consisting of a rocky ground cover and native or low-water plants). Yet several different studies have concluded that xeriscapes exacerbate the UHI (cite) and may or may not significantly lower water usage, depending on how carefully the homeowner waters what plants there are (cite).

Much of this climate data has been collected on a macro or mesoscale, working with satellite imagery to determine heat signatures or relying on climate models. Few studies have focused on the urban climate at the microscale–

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Much of this climate data has been collected over entire cities (the macroscale) or over sections of the city containing multiple houses, businesses, and the like (the mesoscale).  Few studies have examined the urban climate at the level that people actually live at–the microscale. This is the area in a 1m to 10m swath, such as occurs in a persons front or back yard, along a pedestrian walkway, or outside of the workplace entrance. I propose–

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